I'm too headachey to give you a proper review but basically, this is so great. I'm very much intrigued, the dialogue sounds very much in character, the interactions are on point AND I WANT TO KNOW WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEN RIGHT NOW.
I like the situation they're being confronted with, and more over their reactions to it all. And you have all this stuff going on, but you're keeping it coherent enough so we're not lost in the scuffle. But there are still more things left to be answered. And I'm going to get rambly, so thanks for this--can't wait for more! :)
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Date: 2008-10-28 09:59 pm (UTC)I like the situation they're being confronted with, and more over their reactions to it all. And you have all this stuff going on, but you're keeping it coherent enough so we're not lost in the scuffle. But there are still more things left to be answered. And I'm going to get rambly, so thanks for this--can't wait for more! :)